- Since Mrs.Jones changed Rogers point of view he want to thank her
When Roger got the money from Mrs.Jones he skipped around happily. A week later When he went to the story he thought that he shouldn't buy the shoes he wanted and that he should buy Mrs.Jones a gift. He walked into the story and got her a necklace. The necklace only coast 5 dollars. This is a perfect gift to give to her he thought. When he got to her house he knocked on the door. A large lady opened and ask " Hello who are you." Roger replies its me Roger.Oh I remember you she said. Why did you come back do you want to steal my purse again. NO! Roger exclaimed I wanted to give you this Necklace I bought because you changed my point of view of people. Awe.. Thank you!! she said with a tear shedding down her face.Then she shut the door. When Roger was about to walk away he knocks on the door again. Mrs. Jones answer the door. With dead silence he gave her a big hug and ran off.
I love the ending to this piece! If the original story were to have continued, that is exactly how it would have gone... "With dead silence he gave her a big hug and ran off." PERFECT! Just like how Mrs. Jones left Roger originally. The only thing that you need to work on is your grammar-- especially when using dialogue. Everything else looks good!! :D
ReplyDeleteGreat job, Brooke!